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My Rain

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The woman tilted her head back. Her long elegant neck was exposed, vulnerable, as her eyes closed as soft sweet gasp expanding her lungs. Water dripped down her white face, soaking her brown hair to black and ran along her dry, cracked lips. Her black eyelashes brushed against her pink cheeks as they slipped closed. The rain caressed her skin as she let it erase all the cruel words, all the hurt, all the pain and just lived.
Peacefully.
In the moment.
Now.
Besides...
What could  possible be wrong with a girl standing in the rain?
semi-happy story Writing Emote - NaNo5 

for :iconurbangirl98: 

...because i fail at happy stories... Sweating a little... ... so this will be the replacement.??? i guess!! I'm a failure :CheerUp: 
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Aaww!! Thank you kitti x3 And no matter. You haven't failed. You're story is really quite thrilling! I love it ^^

I love how this conveys so much emotion despite the length of the piece. I think that the length definitely adds to it ^^ Short yet sweet. (or bittersweet xD)

It just shows so much of the character! In only a few sentences! I should really just do something like this for all of my characters xD